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I read it through a second time, and still can''t find anything that I consider "wrong". I missed about half JSwing''s red marks too (Maybe I''m just not meant to be critical...)
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My only query is - will this story devolve (IMO it''s devolution) into an R16/18 in the next installment, or does the story concentrate more on the problems they face with their arrangement? (Or some other branch-off that I can''t think of...)
Waiting to see how the story turns out...
Faradhi Sobriet-Treves
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