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I have a few questions before I make some last minute changes so I need some REAL feedback from aspiring game developers and story developers. I don't care what you have to say just as long as it can help me improve my story's plot.
Here's the root of the problem. You're asking a forum of writers to give you feedback and criticism of your storyline and plot, when you're more worried about divulging your game concept and (I assume) game mechanics.
What part of your game do you believe is so industry-shattering? The storyline, or the mechanics involved in the game itself?
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I did'nt mean that someone would steal ideas from the story, that would'nt happen in a million years thats why the story is the way it is. My idea for the game is what i'm hiding, Why? cause i'm 100% percent sure the idea has never been used before it's been used but not the way I plan to use it.
Looking at the website (both before and after modification), there is nothing there about the story at all. You have brief character descriptions, a vague plot outline, and...that's it. No story at all. Here's your entire storyline, taken straight off your website:
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Alternate Universe...AU has no time travel at all it mainly deals with the known basic elements, Fire, Water, Darkness, Holy, Wood, Earth, Wind, and Metal.The Alternate Universe is technically a dreamworld but is more of a reality which is the main reason why people want it. There is also a parallel universe which is where many of the important battles take place. Keep in mind that not just anyone can travel to the AU and it has nothing to do with computers.Anyone who finds out about the AU is forever cursed and if ordered he or she must protect it.
That's it. "There's this alternate world where people fight." That's your idea; there is no story, no plot. When we say there is nothing to critique, it's because there really isn't anything there. You have to give more if you want more in return.
Take a few minutes and look at some other posts that have gone up, all with similar requests as yours. You'll see that other people DO, in fact, post up a page or two of their writing. Based on what you've given us, this forum can't respond otherwise, except to say "is that it?"
Edit: I read your storyline to a co-worker, looking for an objective view. He has nothing to do with writing or a game design, he just likes playing vid games.
He listens, thinks for a moment, and said "It sounds like a new level for Mortal Kombat."
'nuff said.
[edited by - EricTrickster on March 30, 2004 1:24:06 PM]
